Wow. You have some really tough critics here. I really enjoyed this poem. The rhythm flowed and supported your meaning. I'm a sucker for when form and meaning meet. While the spaces in the words might have been a bit kitsch, it was certainly a daring thing to do. I don't know whether it's good or not, but I have to say I was amused by it at least, so I'll say it was good. The fourth stanza's weak, and some of the lines could be strengthened, but I still like this poem.
Points: 890
Reviews: 212
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